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PostSubject: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Sat Oct 08, 2016 7:49 pm

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Name: Accelerator
Age: 16
True Age: 16
Sex: Male
Personality: Accelerator has been targeted by assassins serving companies, people, and or governments/private entities wanting to harness his overwhelming natural abilities for years, and as such has become a fairly distrusting person that trusts few other than himself. His beliefs as an individual basically revolve around one key concept, that concept being power. He wants to have power to protect himself, and to destroy those around him whom do him harm. Accelerator is selfish, he cares little for the feelings, beliefs or condition of others unless they’re small children or something of the like. He can be made to care, it just certainly takes some outside interference, and it must ultimately show up at his doorstep, as he will not go out of his way for matters of compassion by any means.

While in combat, Accelerator thrives as a sadistic, nonchalant individual hellbent on destruction, pain, and devastation.  He enjoys fighting those strong enough to present a challenge for him and even more so enjoys those select few who can hold the claim of being even more powerful than he is. Due to the power granted by his natural abilities, and the overwhelming hatred he has for people in general, he is a reckless individual within combat and borders on insanity. He remains focused on his goal or goals in combat and the goal/goals are to kill whoever opposes him, and to have fun doing so. Weaker opponents usually fall victim to his tedious and otherwise unrelenting power levels, and he’s known to be very sadistic in combat. Inflicting pain on others is almost like a game to him, and in this regard he is truly one of the scariest characters you could ever have the displeasure of coming across.

More interesting than this is the reason he wants power, in a way Accelerator is somewhat like a Pacifist. He wants to get stronger and stronger only so that no one would dare raise a finger against him, the idea that someone would do that to him drives him insane, he’s tired of being targeted and as such wants to become strong enough to where he cannot be a target. He often even goes as far as trying to talk down weaker opponents, and keep them from fighting him knowing the damage in which he can cause and the relative ease in which he can do so. His ambitions are definitely one of the more interesting aspects of his character, as the passive-aggressive dynamic to his otherwise Sadistic Character hardly seems fitting. Regardless of his ambitions, mistaking him for someone to let you live after the fact is a mistake many have made and none can claim success, in fact, none of them can claim much of anything anymore.

Another interesting aspect of Accelerators character is the overwhelming air of arrogance he gives off in battle and in life regardless of circumstance. Those stronger or weaker are generally looked at about the same in terms of value and respect, and he legitimately feels as though he is inherently better than whatever competition is stupid enough to stand before him. This aspect of his character carries over to how he acts in social situations as well, completely unwilling to acknowledge any form of power or status over him and generally speaking, he is willing to push the limits of anyone. He is known for getting a rush in combat when fighting someone stronger than himself, and although rarely the initial instigator to a battle he does not have a problem in continuing a fight by any means, in fact, he almost revels in it. He does not enjoy combat for the glory of it, but for the knowledge of his growing power and the necessity of it to him.

Though he has few qualms with killing out of necessity, he has certainly shown a small capacity for empathy where it has room to be granted without risk. He envies those who can protect those around them and themselves without having to be ultra violent and murderous, and almost seems to idolize those who can protect themselves and others in the fashion of a true hero. He is almost like a lost child wrapped in a layer of darkness, though there is light in him if you dig deeply enough. He does not enjoy killing those that he does not have to, though it’s more of an internal battle than an external one and his external demeanor typically does not depict the internal struggles he has when he’s forced to take the lives of others. He refuses to show this side of himself to anyone however, as he does not want to come across as weak, and he does seem somewhat aware of the way other people think of him, and as such he conducts himself in a way in which they’re unlikely to think differently of him, just as he prefers.


Likes: Being Sadistic, being powerful, tough calculations.
Fears: Pain, losing, not being powerful.

Character Appearance

Height: 5 foot 6 inches (168 Centimeters)
Weight: 120 pounds-130 pounds (fluctuates)
Physical Traits:


You can ignore the written appearance and just look at the pwetty picture.
Accelerator is a lanky teenager with pale white features all around, moppy white hair that falls right above his eyes in a spiky fashion, and his eyes are a blood red color matching the typical scenery of which they endure. He keeps up with his hygiene surprisingly and has pearly white teeth and a well trimmed face to show for it, he has no facial hair of any kind and he has no plans on trying for any. His skin is as white as it is because his abilities block even the sun’s ultraviolet rays, thus stopping melanin production leaving him little to no true chance of getting a tan no matter how hard he were to try, not that him trying for one is exactly a likely possibility. On top of this, his abilities also block outside influence so much that it causes a loss of balance in his hormones leading to an almost androgynous appearance leading some to question his gender, though he certainly appears male and has the male sexual features and mental aspects overall. His slim build coupled with his stature certainly gives him the much expected appearance of a teenage boy, especially when coupled with his somewhat messy style of dress and primping, as such, despite his upkeep of hygiene, he can still have a somewhat apathetic appearance overall.

On top of his interesting physical figure, Accelerators style of dress is unique to say the least, and matches his physical appearance very well being almost a perfect compliment regardless of what he decides to be wearing at any given time. Accelerator has a well documented affinity for primarily white clothing with black and or grey as the secondary colors and trims, and this color code is generally followed head to toe at all times regardless of circumstances and what they would typically permit and or ask for. He has three pairs of skinny jeans, black, white, and grey, he has baggy grey sweatpants in his wardrobe, and several shirts with similar color schemes. One his preferred shirts is a black shirt with white striped patterns, and another favorite of his is a white shirt with V patterns down the center, and he also frequently uses a black electrode enhanced choker allowing him access to any and all networks to perform calculations for him whenever he deems this necessary. On top of this, he usually wears black, grey, or white Chucks/Converses, and socks to match the color scheme of his pants which usually cover them primarily. He also wears 3 different belts, a black belt, a white belt, and a grey one each made to compliment a particular attire.

Clothing: See Above
Accessories: See above

Fighting Style

General Fighting Style: Accelerator is what is known as both a berserker and a glass cannon. He will rush the opponent at will, he can be either passive or aggressive dependent on his mood, and he likes to slowly torture, and maim opponents, before inevitably ending their lives. He is not used to receiving much punishment, if any at all, and as such his durability and pain tolerance are almost astronomically low. His general combat tendencies are simple, rush and overpower, and if he can't do this? He's in deep trouble.

Strengths: Defense, due to his reflect and vector control abilities his defenses are almost impenetrable, and as such he can tank almost any one attack. He is known for his ability to think on his feet in combat, something that is glossed over greatly due to his excellent background in mathematics and scientific data, as well as a formal interest in war generals and strategies, and battle techniques. As such, he is almost a scholar in the field of battle. His speed and strength are impressive, he can crack the earth with his insane Reitsu reserves that he can translate to spiritual pressure, or with simple physical strength alone.

Weaknesses: Accelerator has no accurate way to naturally gauge the power level of opponents, and he would treat a 1-1 the same way he would a 3-3, at least initially. His glass-cannon status very simply means that despite his abnormal offensive capabilities, he can be taken out very easily. Scale is durability down almost an entire tier for realistic accuracy. (If he's 1-1, his durability would be like a weak 2-1.) He is also known to rely on Reitsu reserves to drive him, once his very low stamina is depleted, and despite this abundance of Reitsu within him, it inevitably leads to depletion once his at his limit. He has no speed variant that can keep up with Sonido or Shunpo, and thus it is a weakness.

Primary Stage

Ability Name: Accelerate
Description: Accelerator is named after his ability. It creates a thin field of Reitsu around him, which allows him to modify the vector values of anything he touches. This however has obvious drawbacks. This ability is inherent, and leads to the techniques listed below. This ability cannot be used outside of the expressed capacity of the techniques below. (Though if it's on NPCs and just random people who cares. Just no actual Players and RPers.)

Ability Name: Redirection (Barrage Blocker)
Description: By changing the vector values of anything by touch; Accelerator is able to redirect any and all forms of energy at leisure. If he were to for example, be shot at, he could redirect the kinetic energy of the bullets, and deflect them back towards the shooter albeit with minimal accuracy. ALL attacks with power less than or equal to Hadou 50 are blocked, for one post. Anything stronger goes through, this has a 3 post cooldown. OR it can be used for 3 posts, with a 5 post cooldown.

Ability Name: Reflect
Description: This can block up one attack at Hadou 70 level with a one post cooldown, or two with a two post cooldown.

Ability name: Shield
Description: This can block one attack of Hadou 90 level or lower, with a 4 post cooldown. The attack will dissipate on impact.

Ability Name: Telekinesis
Description: Due to Accelerators ability to manipulate Vectors at will, he can very easily launch any object in the environment at or under the weight of a truck at an opponent at surprising speeds. If the object is under 1000 pounds, it can be launched at Bala speeds. Over 1000? Cero Speeds. He can only launch up to 5 objects per post though. 10 ton weight cap.

Ability Name: Vibration Step
Description: Accelerator can use Reitsu and Reishi vibrations all around him as a vector for movement, allowing him to keep up with even high level Shunpo or Sonido. Spammable, just like those two.


Final Stage

Ability Name: Vector Control Expanded
Description: Essentially this form acts as an expansion of the Primary Stage, and serves as little else. All Prior Abilities retained.  

Plasma Cannon- Accelerator can gather energy from the area around him in the palms of his hand, and form plasma, enough to launch a blast much like a Kamehameha at an opponent. This would do Gran Rey Cero Damage, and has a 1 post charge time with a 2 post cooldown.

Ability Name: Wings
Description: Accelerator can sprout wings out of the Reitsu reserves within his body, however, these can all only last for 5 posts before retracting back into his body. He can use these to fly, or to shield him, as they themselves serve as both a solid shield of solidified Reitsu. He can use these wings to reflect one attack, and one attack only back towards another target, but nothing stronger than a Gran Rey Cero; and once he does this, the wings become useful solely for flying, and for a shield, the shield however works solely as Hierro, shielding him from the brunt of an attack, but not the whole attack in and of itself.  An attack of Hadou 70-80 or better will destroy the wings, and they cannot be called upon again for 5 posts.

Ability Name: Wind Blades
Description: Accelerator can gather the winds to form a vacuum, and as he slashes his hands a slash much like that of Baku from Naruto's will emit from the tips of his fingers, heading towards an opponent at Bala level speeds. The cuts aren't anything to laugh off, as they're much like being cut up by a Shikai level blade by a Shinigami.

Ability Name: Armor Lock 1.0
Description: By holding still, Accelerator can withstand up to 2 Gran Rey Cero level attacks, over any span of posts. Once this is used up however, he requires a 5 post cooldown.

Hyper Mode

Ability Name: Shockwaves
Description: Accelerator can build Reitsu and translate it to high energy to his various appendages, and make it lethal. Shockwaves sent throughout the earth on impact. Getting hit by this would be equivalent to getting hit by a Cero, point blank. Lasts 2 posts with a 3 post cooldown. Can use up to 3 per post.

Ability Name: Angel Wings
Description: Accelerator's wings from the previous form expand from 6 feet in width to 9, and can now reflect two large scale attacks before becoming little more than a barrier, as opposed to one. They last now for a duration of 7 posts but once they wear off they are gone for the duration of the thread. He can now use the wind generated from them to send back attacks with power weaker than or equal to a Bala once a post. The Reitsu used to form these wings now serve to cover Accelerator from head to toe, and the wings as well as the Reitsu coating can be used to amplify physical attacks, and work as fairly strong Heirro. (think wearing brass knuckles then punching someone in the face or cutting them with Reitsu covered wings.) They can withstand a Cero Obscuras or Hadou 85, but nothing more. Can only withstand one attack like this. Obviously used for flight as well. This isn't so much meant to be a final, but rather an amplified version of his prior "Wings" Tech.

Ability Name: Plasma Balls
Description: Spammable, Cero level balls of plasma to be launched at an opponent at speeds equal to a Cero, but with slightly more burning damage.

Ability Name: Tornado's
Description: Accelerator can manifest the wind much as earlier, and translate it to outright velocity and torque creating a tornado to butcher whoever is in it's way. Travels at the speed of a Cero. 2 post cooldown, some variant of wings must be active for this to be used.

Ability Name: Ultimate Armor Lock, Dissipate.
Description: Accelerator can block any attack, including a final attack, regardless of power, or quantity, for a whole post. Then, he is exhausted, and worn down.




Boosts: Strength, Speed, Stamina, and Reitsu X 4. Durability X 2.

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Background: Accelerators first memories.. Were not of anything specific, they were more of feelings, as opposed to events. Feelings of hatred, sadness, and loneliness. His parents were killed when he was a little boy by a Hollow, a Gillian class Hollow to be precise. Yet when the Hollow went for him.. It's existence, as well as the house Accelerator was residing in, was torn to shreds. At 5 years old, Accelerators existence was very easily summed up by declaring him both a monster, and a power. His power was unlike anything most men had ever seen, his Spiritual Pressure was rare for adults, let alone children. The beginnings of his conscious life were more or less filled with loneliness, and homelessness. He had no where to go, and no one willing to take him in.

Accelerator does not remember his birth name, only that it was not Accelerator. This was the name granted to him by who was his adopted father, Dr. Mizuku, whom took him in. Mizuku was well aware of the abilities of Accelerator, and only intended to study them and harness them for his own good, but to Accelerator, this was more love than he'd known in several years. As an eight year old boy, Accelerator excelled in all forms of schooling and learning, by the age of 12 he had an IQ well exceeding 300, and his mind worked through calculations quicker than most people deemed to be humanly possible. Yet it was not this that set him apart from other people, once again it was his unique, and otherwise unfulfilled potential for combat.

Dr. Mizuku had begun devising a plan to truly bring out the powers of Accelerator that he had been hoping to see. He Moved to Karakura Town for what seemed to be no apparent reason, but he did have a reason. His reasoning was that the town was known for, renowned for it's spiritual energy, and the presence of Hollows and other enhanced beings. He hoped that some may attack Accelerator, and that he could learn of his true capabilities in combat. He wanted to know to what exact ends Accelerators abilities could be used, and to what unfathomable extent could his power go? The first attack did not take long, and having hacked most of the cities Video cameras, Dr. Mizuku could see it all..

An Adjuchas class Hollow attacked Accelerator, it thought it would find a cheap meal in the form of the small, androgynous boy. Needless to say, it was more than surprised to find that upon charging a Cero to launch at him, it was reflected back at him, Splattering him with all the intended force it had wanted to put towards Accelerator. It had not come alone however, and soon 3 more Gillian level Hollow approached Accelerator, each launching a Cero of their own only to garner results that were consistent with those of the Hollow that had tried before. 5 Garden Variety Hollow approached, and by this point, Accelerator was frightened into action. With tears in his eyes he screamed, he felt a great release of energy and noticed that they had been leveled by said release. He also noticed a tingling in his back, and that he had sprouted wings. His sobbing only intensified upon his father coming to find him, but he was more than a little loyal to the fact that he was not rejected, but rather warmly welcomed, and taken home.

Having seen what a monstrous child Accelerator truly was, the doctor was both enticed and a little frightened, he decided that he would hire mercenaries to carry out hits on him. If they succeeded, his fears would be no more, if they did not, they were simply grooming a weapon for his inevitable usage. This proposition seemed like a win-win, and Accelerator knew none the better. Accelerator probably would have become suspicious, had several government agencies not attempted to kill him much in the same way that these hired mercenaries did. He grew tired of the hatred, and fear that his power created. He grew sick of the human interference with his life, and made it a point to not only redirect their gazes, but through power he would make them ignore his existence. He fought so that he would never fight again, and used sadism as a means to reduce temptation for others, but soon? This innate sadism consumed him.

One of these many attacks was staged with Accelerator walking home. He noticed the bullets flying at him, and only stopped long enough to watch the bullets fly every which way they could, all killing mercenaries in every direction of which they went. As he looked onward, he noticed one mercenary attempting to crawl away. "Well that just won't do now will it.." a slight grin crossed his face, all the years of abuse and hatred that had consumed him for so long manifested themselves in the form of his soon to be despicable actions. He approached the man with a smile that would have made the devils blood run a hint colder. "You think you're leaving?.."

His face contorted into a state of madness as he lifted the man from the ground by his leg, "I see one of those stray bullets hit you in the shoulder right there.." He shoved a finger into the wound and listened to the therapeutic screams of the man. The man begged and pleaded, knowing full well he was about to be a dead man. I wonder what would happen if I reversed your blood flow..  Let's find out together new friend!" The man screamed, but it did not last long. His heart had burst, clots began to fill his body all over. Accelerator smiled as if he had done the work of a saint as opposed to the work of a sinner, such acts he decided would benefit him, and past that? What should he care?.. What should a benevolent being such as himself really care about when it came to the feelings of others..?

Accelerator returned home, to see an Arrancar with a sword through his fathers chest, it had consumed the doctors wife before he arrived. His madness drove him over the edge, the Spiritual Pressure that flooded out from within him was as heavy as anything the Arrancar had ever felt. Wings larger than those from before sprouted from his back, the Arrancar launched a volley of Bala yet they were all sent back towards him with haste. Accelerators face contorted in an instant from sadness, to laughter. "I WILL MAKE ALL FEAR ME, YOU WILL ALL PERISH." He charged the Arrancar, his speed was amplified to the point of absurdity. He grabbed it by the throat and kept punching, and punching, and punching, till all he was punching was mush.

Accelerator looked at the puddle, the mess he had created, and stepped back. His wings dissipated, his eyes slowly began to grasp the atrocities in which this maniacal state had led him to be capable of. He then looked down to see the only father figure he had ever known at his feet, dead. His Mother wasn't even a corpse enough to bury, he simply saw the bloodstain, and the amulet she always wore. He balled in the corner for what seemed like hours, before slowly getting to his feet, and looking around. His will had went from paper to steel, his mind went from a haze to clear. He knew what he had to do, and he would do it. All in due time.. Power so great that none could challenge... That would be his quest... It had to be..

Side Notes: I'm really gunning for a 1-3 or better with this guy, so if that cannot be worked out please elaborate as to how I could improve this app, or as to when I should revisit the matter before approving..

RP Sample: Ika took a drag off his cigarette before noticing the very fabric of space and time rip itself to pieces, a portal had taken the place of what was once very clear and normal air. "Well... that's one way to make an entrance..." He sighed almost apathetically as he watched the Gargantua open, he assumed a few Hollow would spill out to challenge him, which was by no means unusual in this current day and age. He raised an eyebrow as he heard a very quick snap, then saw a Hollow hit the ground. Before it could even know it made contact, two Bala hit it and spread the contents of it's dead and departed soul across the rustic streets of Rome. He could only chuckle as the man whom he assumed had opened the Gargantua stepped out and made first contact with the fresh air that was Rome. "Welcome to our lovely piece of paradise! We hope you enjoy the scenery Mr... what's your name?" Ika asked this with a confidence and swagger uniquely his own, it was neither provocative nor genuine, it quite simply just was.

Ika could only continue the haphazard grin that he had dawned a little bit earlier as the man took notice of his work. "I see you've taken notice of my artwork, what do you think?" He said this with a nonchalant, almost bored tone that was still very obviously laced in dry wit if only noticeable to the speaker himself. The man before him had silver hair that shimmered in the light that illuminated the area between them, he had never seen him before here, or elsewhere, and was more than a little curious as to who exactly had just showed up. The mans dark blue eyes worked as an excellent contrast to the skies around them, and to Ika's own eyes which were of a pale, almost silver blue. They appeared much as ice would under normal circumstances, and they served as the perfect parallel to his personality. Cold.

Ika heard the man speak and refer to him as a mixed breed, to which he could only chuckle, lightly bemused by this course of action and of course name-calling. "I like to think that mutts even can have some flare for the dramatics, after all, you can't deny that the scenery hasn't been livened up a bit by this display, why I think this was just what this town needed!" He noticed the flailing of the mans arms every which way they moved, and did his best to continue treating this man as a serious threat. Ika heard the comment about the acid showers and chuckled loudly to himself once more. "Well, that's a bit of a primitive way to look at things don't you think? I'd like to believe I'm something of a mix, the best of both worlds if you will!"

Ika noticed the man pull his arms back, and he saw the reveal of the cowl on the left shoulder of the armor. The man was covered head to toe in sands and he had to assume that he coming from in or around Las Noches. "So sir, What part of Hueco Mundo are you from?" He asked this with clear intentions before switching off. "Secondly, I only killed one man because that was all that provoked me, but who knows? Maybe I'll string you up next to him for some macabre hang out time. I'm sure he's lonely up there all alone after all.. but I didn't see the need or point in killing more than this, I still hope you'll enjoy my art show! I've done a lot to make this happen.. So enjoy!.. Ika said this to the almost soothing serenade of dripping blood. Drip. Drip. Drip.. Drip...


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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Mon Oct 10, 2016 4:36 pm

ok so, I know we like allot of detail, but 12 huge paragraphs of text where you go over similar points more than once is a bit much. Streamline it to about six please, no one will ever read all that, and the idea of that is to get across to others how he acts. if no one reads it, then its not doing its job.

The same can be said for his appearance. Use a picture or something, but you really dont need such huge paragraphs. Quantity =/= quality, Jeff.

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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Tue Oct 11, 2016 2:03 am

Okay, so here's what I've got.

For his appearance, we actually encourage the use of pics instead of text for this, so the lengthy description explaining why he looks the way he does isn't necessary for the purposes of getting a better tier. Neither is outlining contents of his entire wardrobe. Just saying. XD

His general fighting style part is a little short compared to the rest of it, but it's not that big of a deal I guess.

For Shield 2.0, you need to put an upper limit on the damage this can stop, and this will mean an increased cooldown. Being able to block anything over a cero with only a 1 post cooldown is a bit silly.

The Hyper Mode version of redirect is the same problem. You need to put an upper limit, rather than "20 bala-calibre or higher". Depending on the limit, this will need a cooldown as well.

Last thing. For the Angel's Wings power, I presume it means he can block a total of a Cero Oscuros, rather than 2 separate attacks? If the first is correct, then it's fine. If it's the latter. will need an extra couple of posts of cooldown.

That's all I've got.

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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Tue Oct 11, 2016 2:12 am

Fair enough, changes made. Though I question how he is a berserker if all of his powers bar one are defensive.

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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Tue Oct 11, 2016 2:23 am

Because he has no fear of getting hit, so why wouldn't he just attack attack attack, plus his force alone causes the earth to crack so I mean.. He's badass xD..

On a serious note, I still am kinda wanting to hold off till I can get some feedback as to how I could make this app 1-3 caliber?.. Not to be an as.. But dude, I still have no one over 1-4, and I don't think Accel will work as one of the weaker characters tier wise on the site. Not since I want him to be dominant.. Not Op but dominant when I use him, that's literally his sole purpose. 15 paragraphs of relevant details but shit, give me something to work with.
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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Tue Oct 11, 2016 12:00 pm

I think its fair to say since you've never had someone higher than 1-4, Orgoth's made the choice on tier with that in account. That and, as rena said you've been gone for so long, maybe he's decided not to trust you with that level of power. As for your argument, he is still a 1 tier. He can challange anything up to a 1-2 and have a decent chance of winning. But besides tier, and what you want, things dont always play out the way you'd like in a fight, so he's not always going to dominate anyway. He could lose to a 2-1. He probably wouldn't but who knows.

Another point. Its in his personality allot, how he wants to become powerful. So perhaps with that in mind 1-4 is a good place to start. He's strong, but not the strongest he could be. Think about it, on a character progression point of view. Regardless i'm not going to overrule Orgoths decision.

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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Fri Nov 11, 2016 2:11 am

Modified, with my guidance, so clearly I'm a bit biased and you'll need to have the seconder check this over. But I don't see anything screaming rape GM OP. so... Approval. Same tier.

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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Fri Nov 11, 2016 2:36 am

Shield in primary stage needs to have a 4 post cd. Hado 90 is a big deal.

Plasma Cannon: 3 post cd, strictly. Alternatively, 1 post charge time with 2 post cd. Unless it has some special attributes to it...otherwise it's barely underpowered.

Wind Blades: Don't know Baku. Say they're not anything to laugh at, but only know that it's bala speed, but haz 1 post cd...any approximate power?

Armor Lock Disipate: Lol nope. Last Resorts are included in that, and that right there is a definite nope. I want Zenke/Orgoth to edit this post for this particular ability, since I'm doing this while tired and not sure if it needs anything else...there's a few characters that can use multiple hard hitting attacks in a single post, but not many. *looks at Kai, Aki, possibly Riku, Yuri, and Rui.*

Shockwaves: How many per post? During that period?

Angel Wings: Once per thread is a big deal, but I don't get how strong this is? It...sounds like a last resort, without it being one...*looks at Yuri's Genesis* I'm assuming that's the spirit you want to get, but if you want a last resort, this one is very weak compared to a lot of others...Idk, try putting this into a context/Scenario...

Plasma Balls: Lol nope. If you want speed, you sacrifice punch. Otherwise it needs a cooldown or some other drawback. Also, how much faster than cero is it?

All I got.

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Telekenisis: a single unloaded truck can weigh up to 14 tons, and this doesn't specify that it has no load, so, like, max weight he can move should be locked to 10 tons. .Not a truck.

Armor Lock Dissipate: as jun said anything but finals. I think its fair you include he sacrifices the ability to attack to maintain this, given that other than finals he can block 3 powerful attacks in a row. You also have Armor Lock Dissipate in hyper mode, but it says it can only block one attack. Probably a bit redundent since you got slapped with a "No finals" unless you give this a limit of say, it can block 3 gran ray cero, or something. Probably better getting rid of the second version and moving this to hyper mode.



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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Sat Nov 12, 2016 10:43 pm

Fixed
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PostSubject: Re: Accelerator Finished, Need to know what needs fixed.   Mon Nov 14, 2016 4:12 pm

Ultimate Armor Lock, Dissipate: I assume that last sentence means he's in fatigue state for the rest of the thread? If so, then this guy has my approval, everything else seems fixed. Just tell me in chat or something, and I'll move and lock.

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